Weddings, roast beef and watermelons
Hi Jenny,
Wow! You are a writing machine! It’s really wonderful to meet someone who is really motivated to communicate in English. I feel lucky to have you as my student blogger. We have so much to talk about, so let’s begin…
My wife is actually Japanese. We had a traditional Japanese wedding last year. My family came to Japan for the ceremony, and I wore a hakama, which is a kind of kimono for men. If you are interested I could post a picture next time.
I’d love to tell you the recipe for roast beef, but I have no idea! I am absolutely hopeless at cooking. I think my mum’s roast beef is the best. Actually, I’m sure that everyone thinks their mum’s cooking is the best. Am I right?
It’s interesting to read about watermelons in China. You can buy them in Japan too, but they are so expensive. One whole watermelon costs about 5 pounds or more!
Positive points:
Style
I really like your communicative style. It’s informal, friendly and shows a desire to communicate. It’s great for a blog.
Paragraphing
You try hard to write English in clear paragraphs, which is great. Try to make sure that each paragraph contains one clear topic.
Range
You have used a wide range of structures and vocabulary in your writing, which I really like. Don’t be afraid to experiment and try new things!
I’ve picked out a couple of things to think about this time:
Tense
You wrote these two sentences ‘the watermelon's price decrees (spelling!) down to the history record’ and ‘(The) Government encouraged people to eat more watermelon and gave farmers some subsidies’. I guess that you mean these three actions happened in the past, but they are still related to the present time. In this case, maybe it would be better to use a present perfect structure to emphasise their importance now.
Collocations and phrases with prepositions
I think that you have used a good range of vocabulary in your writing Jenny. I think that noticing collocations and prepositions in English is really important, especially when you are reading. Here are a few for you to notice and add to your notebook:
Verb-Noun Collocations
have a good harvest
commit suicide
Prepositions
in her field
in the morning
in recent years
the lowest price on record
I hope this helps. I look forward to hearing from you tomorrow.
Good night.
Lewis
Comments
yes, I’m sure that everyone thinks their mum’s cooking is the best. lewis, i still remember you fist time talking about your favourite about eating, you are such a lucky person. i admire your mum's cooking. i am looking forward to seeing if there is the chance to have a look of your mum's kitchen? or her photo with you? especially you in your wedding dress. i am sure your wife is very beautiful too. hope to hear from you soon.
I like this website, we can know every vividly.
Hello again! My husband always says that he misses his mum''s sunday lunch too. He is an English. I got married twice to same man Because we had a traditional korean wedding like you and your wife and we had another write wedding in England. did you make any mistake during the wedding processure? can you speak Japaness? I bet your wife can speak English very well as you are teaching English. uesing correct prepositions are very difficult for me,but i am very positive now because you will teach us how to use prepositions. thank you,and by now
Hi, I am raring to look at your wedding picture. You are so luck to marry a Japanese woman. Reportedly, Japanese women are the tenderest women in the world. Am I right? I miss my dad's kitchen. His working place was nearer my house than my mother's, so he cooked much more. Is it interesting,isn't? Thanks again!
Hi. and thanks for all.. Really nice.. I want to know, how verb become a noun? and How adjetive become a noun? Thanks for you'r help. Cya folks.
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